Friday Fictioneers – February 8/13

Friday Fictioneers is sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.  The idea is to write a 100 word story with a beginning, middle and end based on the photo prompt.

Photo copyright: Rich Voza

copyright-Rich Voza

Mr. Potato Head

(100 words)

“Well, Christ.  Ain’t that a shitty postcard.”  He tossed it across the distressed table.  She watched it sail over and fall onto the shag rug.

“He’s just a kid, Tom.  What does he know?”  She bent over and retrieved it, eager to read the simple, printed words.

KOWABUNGA!  TREVOR

“What the hell is kowabunga?  I don’t even know what goddamn country that would be from.  You telling me you got any bloody clue?”

She examined the stamp.  Mexico.  He had made it.

“Nope.”  She turned away from him and flipping the card, smiled at the brilliant sun.

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42 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – February 8/13

  1. i was recently talking to writers about how to build tension. one way is to have a character lie, and we know, but the character being lied to does not know. it creates unanswered questions, such as “why did she lie? what happens if he finds out?” etc. so there you go – creating tension. well done.

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  3. Dear Denmother,

    Strange, but I got ‘Kowabunga!’ right away. Felt good about that. There was something of The Great Escape and Shawshank Redemption in your tale, but I could be imagining things. either way I liked the way you put it together and the way she wouldn’t let on that she knew.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  4. I loved the interaction between the two, and how Tom couldn’t even be bothered to do something so simple as to look at the stamp (just like my dad!)

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