Friday Fictioneers – March 15/13

Friday Fictioneers is sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.  The idea is to write a 100 word story with a beginning, middle and end based on the photo prompt.

Photo copyright: Lara Mitchell

Copyright - Lora Mitchell

ICU

(100 words)

From the ledge beyond there was life.

Even the plant, the hideous and stinky gift-store plant, smelling like premature death and funeral homes showed its life force, shamelessly splayed stamens in full flowers, and tightly guarding others for future blooming.  Cars teemed down the avenue; lights pulsed from office floors and street lamps.

He was drawn to all of it.  If asked to explain his fixation at that ill-timed moment, he would struggle to find the words.

“Daddy.”

Beep.  Beep.  Beep.  Beep.  Be-beep.

He stood steadfast, unable to remove his eye.  The picture blurred.  The life set, but never recorded.

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18 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – March 15/13

  1. My take is the child is recording his loved ones death in the ICU, although kids usually aren’t allowed in. The flower plant was good, really poetic, drawn words. So now when I go back … Is it an adult recording his dads death but he’s younger in his mind? An unfulfilled life or something?

    • Hello, gardenlilie. I didn’t intend for it to come off as that complex. It is a man looking out a window while someone behind him is dying. However, I’m interested in the fact that it draws other interpretations. Thank you for reading and commenting.
      Denmother

      • I like your flash fictions to picture prompts. You write well. I think that is the fascinating part of reading others works, you can put in what fits your own life, all the while wondering what the writer actually meant. Mysteries. Thanks.

  2. Dear Denmother,

    I like the mood you set and the moment you captured. Well done. Live is for the living and it calls to us with motion and light and sound….and love.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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