Dress Rehearsal – Friday Fictioneers May 31/13

Friday Fictioneers is sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.  The idea is to write a 100 word story with a beginning, middle and end based on the photo prompt.

Photo copyright: Janet Webb

Copyright - Janet Webb

Dress Rehearsal

(100 words)

He rinsed off the last of the thick hair, tapping the razor against the side of the ceramic sink.  Hand quivering, he gently placed it down near his ankle, and slowly led it far up his smooth leg.  Silent tears slid down his face into the corners of his painted mouth.  Eyes closed, he reached blindly for the scented lotion, deeply inhaling as he spread it over his hairless legs.  He envisioned the incredible gown he had seen on his commute home, and remembered the novel, stirring feeling of faltering in mother’s heels and bauble jewelry, before father walked in.

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35 thoughts on “Dress Rehearsal – Friday Fictioneers May 31/13

  1. That’s so well written, and I can’t figure out how I’m supposed to feel about the character — you’ve described it in a way that is sensual and beautiful, and perhaps it is only my own personal prejudices or whatnot that make me think of Norman Bates.

  2. Teetering on the edge of a new world… You’ve captured this moment beautifully: sensuality mixed with fear, lust mixed with disgust. Brilliant.
    Btw: you’ve got ‘lead’ for ‘led’ in there – hope you don’t mjnd me pointing it out 🙂

  3. Came over here from el appleby’s site and enjoyed reading the two very different approaches to a similar interpretation of the prompt. Both well done.

  4. Indeed impressive. Well written about what must be a difficult subject for a lot of people, specially those the protagonist represents. Tolerance and acceptance for those that are different and can’t help it.

    I’m posting my link as it doesn’t seem to work from the comments, but it should be fixed on the inlinkz site. http://pviljoen.wordpress.com/2013/05/31/last-dance/

  5. A great flash and similar to an idea I initially toyed with. Well written – lots of depth to the character and backwater of the relationships and story. Clever title.

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