Peddle – Friday Fictioneers July 19/13

Friday Fictioneers is sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.  The idea is to write a 100 word story with a beginning, middle and end based on the photo prompt.

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Peddle

(103 words)

The summer of 1982 they had traveled to Martha’s Vinyard with their second-hand bikes in the back of their second-hand pick-up.  She had worn her dangerously short, light green dress and peddled hard with her 23-year-old legs, each rotation bringing her closer to a future with him.  The future had looked so bright; her ready to start a family and him ready to start law school.  “I love you”, she had yelled falling behind, and he had turned and replied “sustained”, flashing his beautiful smile.  The sun broke through the clouds and she suddenly lost sight of him in a moment of brilliant blindness.

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23 thoughts on “Peddle – Friday Fictioneers July 19/13

  1. Oh this is deliciously enticing…could be interpreted in many different ways but just dwelling on the imagery alone is blindingly brilliant 😉 You know I am such a HUGE FAN of your F.F, right? Love it! THANK YOU 🙂

  2. What a great job of leaving the ending, good or bad, to us! I really like the way you used “Sustained” for his lawyer-to-be response and I like the contrast of “brilliant blindness” as well. I think this may be the one of yours I’ve enjoyed the most.

    janet

  3. I love the ending. There are so many things we can imagine from it. I’m taking it as a metaphor for the wonderful mystery that is our future, when we are young and on the cusp of a new life. All too soon, the bright and blinding view of that youthful perspective will become dimmer with the gritty reality of time. Dammit.

  4. Excellent! The sudden dramatic closure to the scene was really good. I read it that she’d had some kind of seizure. Well done! I wondered about peddled versus pedalled/pedaled but as you’d used it for the title decided it had some significance.

    • Hi Sandra and thank you. I waffled over the use of the word and in the end thought peddle and its meaning fit with the theme in perhaps a sinister way (the future HAD looked so bright). What we do for love? Love is blind? Selling our souls? Peddling at all costs? I just liked it and points to you for picking up on that. I am enjoying that many readers saw the ending as open and the possibility of finding happiness remains…. YAY!

  5. Dear Denmother,

    Ah. So a play on words. Brilliant blindness…like blinding light. Nice. And nice that you left the reader to draw his or her own conclusions.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  6. I loved this very enjoyable read and the fact that you left the ending to the reader. I particularly liked …’each rotation bringing her closer to a future with him’… so much anticipation, so much unsaid
    Dee

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