Friday Fictioneers is sponsored by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The idea is to write a 100 word story with a beginning, middle and end based on the photo prompt.
Photo copyright: David Stewart
Perspective
(102 words)
“Aw, dad. Really?” He kicked at the metal leg.
“Yes, really, and take it easy. This happens to have been done by a famous sculptor who ended up being imprisoned for his political views. It’s incredible that it’s even still standing.”
He exaggerated his movements, sighing as he placed the headphones on his ears.
“Well I think it’s quite something, John.” She stroked the long arm.
Kelly placed her palm as flat as she could against the outstretched hand.
“Maybe everyone was just mad at him for making such a weird hand. It’s way bigger than anyone’s. Here, you try it, daddy.”
Original take on the prompt, nicely done.
Thanks, Sandra.
25 years later, the son might be in the father’s shoes with HIS son disinterested in what he is saying 🙂
Very true, Abraham.
Denmother
Everyone views art differently. Interesting take on the prompt.
shalom,
Rochelle
This reminds me of the poem about the blind men and the elephant. Each of them touched a different part and thus had a different perspective on what the elephant looked like. The conversation sounded very realistic.
janet
Thanks, Janet.
Love it, very neat!
Thank you, Elephant.
Great, realistic dialogue. I could distinctively hear the child vs daddy’s voice in this. Nice job! A child probably would think logically this way.
yes, your voice’s were distinct and I love the child’s perspective.
Thanks, train-whistle. Heading over to your creation now…
Denmother
EXCELLENT!!
That picture is great, too. It does inspire perspective contemplations.
Thank you for the great feedback!
Denmother
This was such a nice and realistic dialogue. I think you have captured the mind of youth perfectly.
Thanks, Bjorn. I must head over to see what you’ve been up to.
Denmother
It’s great to read the children’s point of view. Wonderful interpretation of the photo prompt!
Thanks, Jan. I’m sure I’ve been both those kids;-)
102 words. here’s where you can save two: “He exaggerated his movements, sighing as he placed the headphones on his ears.” normally, headphones are only put on ears, so you stop the sentence after “…on.”
also, here: “Here, you try it, daddy.” daddy should be capitalized.
well done.
Rich, thank you on both points and taking the time to comment.
Denmother